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I cut up my wrists like cheap coupons,
Did you know that blood is on sale today?

There's a suicide note in every dollar bill,
But only fools think that money can take the pain away.

Masochism is my new religion,
I preach the words into my skin with razor blades and blood stains

I'm getting married in this chapel.
But not to anyone you  know. I am betrothed to the pain.

I'm gambling with cuts and cards up my sleeves
I've drawn my hand and  I throw down my chips as the pain fades.

This casino is quickly running out of blood.
The last card I draw has no power to save me, a lousy two of spades.

Now my pockets are empty and the red stains have dried.
The life force inside is spent.

I cut up my wrists like cheap coupons, the razor slips
And the blood falls. The green paper is jagged and rough, the corners crooked and bent.
Feeling super depressed right now... Ended up writing this depressing thing... *le sigh* I guess its loosely inspired by some of Marilyn Manson's song lyrics, but in no way copies them...
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This is simply amazing. Obviously, not in the part that this is, in fact, a piece of suicidal fragmentation. Amazing due to the fact that your mind works like a college thesaurus. Your wording is absolutely amazing, your words themselves aren't ordinary, rather, aboriginal.

I can easily relate to this, and that's one of many things that makes this so great. You easily summed up a depression episode in poetry. Your similes and metaphors astound me, beyond words.

I like how you have the narrator's point of view, but that you also acknowledge other, "normal", people and their point of views on the depressed. That's good writing.

- KeKo
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smileyjunior711 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
I Love you (: and this is really cool!
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NahaniDawg Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks :D !!!
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mickykilljoy Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this so much Laura! Darker and darker by every poem! I'm so proud :3
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NahaniDawg Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:3 glad you like it!
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mickykilljoy Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:-)
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isasongs Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is very very nice. Love the metaphors and the overall feeling isbrought out nicely.
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NahaniDawg Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :)
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isasongs Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem. Please feel free to check out my work as well.
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